|I’d like to thank the author for considering my comments and for carefully addressing them, however it would be useful for the review process if these responses were attached to the Author’s response document as well as the online discussion.|
I consider that the Author has sufficiently addressed my concerns and the concerns of the editor and I recommend this article for publication following technical corrections.
On reflection for my original suggestion for a deeper analysis of the drawings, unfortunately this is out of my expertise so I cannot offer advice on what these should be. However, I consider the author to be in possession of a potentially fascinating and revealing dataset, most probably unique, of over 10000 drawings collected over ten years. The potential for this to reveal how a generation of children’s views on the environment may have changed and developed over this time is exciting and I hope they consider further analysis of this in the future - I really want to read it!
The manuscript is missing the following required sections (https://www.geoscience-communication.net/submission.html#manuscriptcomposition) -
Data Availability statement (this can be the statement used in the response to my initial comment but needs to be part of the manuscript).
Disclaimer (Use information on Line 392)
Special Issue Statement
Line by Line Comments (from Author’s Response document)
Line 41 - ‘annually’ instead of ‘yearly’
Line 64 - ‘dynamism’ instead of ‘dynamicity’
Line 65-68 - Consider rewording this sentence as it reads like you are claiming to have discovered global warming, which I am sure is not your intent. It also reads like you do not consider human society having a roll in it, again I am sure this isn’t your intent. I’d suggest something like “We also consider Earth’s changing climate as part of its dynamism and something that has affected human civilisation naturally in the past, but with anthropogenic impacts the pace of change is set to have profound impacts on future generations and we are already facing an unfolding climate change crisis.”
Line 72 - Don’t think these all need to captialised “the Earth, science, environment, and sustainable behaviour.”
Line 95-96 - This sentence is unclear, I don’t know what you mean.
Line 99 - The use of I here is not consistent with the rest of the manuscript. I don’t consider the sentence in Line 97-100 is relevant to the readers anyway.
Line 105 - remove ‘also’
Line 114 - Change to ‘were also distributed’
Line 115 - Change ‘to’ to ‘in’
Line 188 - remove ‘games’ before ‘scientific’
Line 131 - change ‘we have choose’ to “we chose” or ‘we selected’, change ‘past’ to ‘previous’
Line 152 - change ‘realized’ to ‘produced’
Line 155 - remove ‘have’ before focused
Line 159 - change ‘of’ to ‘for
Line 165 - Not sure the correct use of homonymous. Instead “…such as the island of Vulcano in the Eolian archipelago, named after ancient roman god of fire said to dwell there.”
Line 178 - Correct ‘con’ to ‘can’
Line 186 - change ‘were’ to ‘was’
Line 195 - Change to “Finally, the Sun’s interaction…”
Line 206-207 - This sentence does not make sense.
Line 208 - ‘sensitize’ does not make sense here, maybe ‘familiarise’?
Line 214 - “…represented as being fought against by “superheroes” or protectors”.
Line 228 - remove comma in ‘message, by’
Line 236 - add ‘are’ between ‘that perceived’
Lines 237-242 - place quotes in quotation marks.
Line 254 - correct typo ‘drawin’
Line 286 - The use of “Children’s fantasy” here makes it would like you are referring to archetypes from literature. I think what you mean “The imaginations of the children offered us…”
Line 289 - remove apostrophe after green
Line 348 - ‘drawing’ to ‘drawings’
Lines 349-350 - “…resulted from a specific in presence educational activity…” I don’t know what you mean here.
Line 351 - ‘Teacher’ to ‘Teachers’
Line 362 - ‘over’ to ‘of’
Line 365 - need an ‘and’ in here.
Lines 367-374 - Great, I’d have liked to have seen a little bit more of this in the manuscript…
Line 399 - I appreciate this, hope the reviews were helpful.