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Arctic Tectonics and Volcanism: a multi-scale, multi-disciplinary educational approach
Grace Shephard
Fenna Ammerlaan
Owen Anfinson
Pascal Audet
Bernard Coakley
Victoria Ershova
Jan Inge Faleide
Sten-Andreas Grundvåg
Rafael Kenji Horota
Karthik Iyer
Julian Janocha
Morgan Jones
Alexander Minakov
Margaret Odlum
Anna Sartell
Andrew Schaeffer
Daniel Stockli
Marie Annette Vander Kloet
Carmen Gaina
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- Final revised paper (published on 16 Dec 2024)
- Preprint (discussion started on 27 Mar 2024)
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RC1: 'Comment on gc-2024-3', Aleksandra Smyrak-Sikora, 03 May 2024
Comments to the authors
Dear authors,
I was invited by the GC editorial support team, Copernicus Publications to review the manuscript, and I found it highly relevant for publication. However, there are some minor corrections that could enhance the reader's overall experience with the manuscript. Please consider my comments and suggestions in the attached PDF file. I am happy to discuss any unclear aspects or misunderstandings.
With kind regards,
Aleksandra Smyrak-Sikora
Comments to the manuscript:
- Does the paper address relevant scientific questions within the scope of GC?
The manuscript by Senger et al. presents the content of the course titled "Arctic Tectonics and Volcanism," organized as part of the NOR-R-AM project ("Changes at the Top of the World through Volcanism and Plate Tectonics"). It provides information about the course objectives, activities, and learning outcomes. Additionally, the manuscript offers references to the data package used for the learning activities and provides an overview of topics used for individual term projects. Furthermore, it informs about the project itself and additional scientific initiatives. Moreover, the paper includes feedback from students in the form of a questionnaire, along with reflections from four students involved in the project activities. This approach clearly fulfills the purpose of GC, which is to help share knowledge in the main subject areas of geoscience education with its pedagogical approach and promote open geoscience through data sharing.
2. Does the paper present novel concepts, ideas, tools, or data?
The paper introduces a novel international approach to teaching Arctic Geology, encompassing various perspectives on the topic. This includes a comprehensive examination from the Earth's mantle to surface geological architecture, as well as the integration of geology and geophysics methods into a single MSc/PhD-level course.
3. Are the scientific methods and assumptions valid and clearly outlined?
The course content is systematically presented, detailing all course modules, introduced methods, and the data package utilized for certain activities. Additionally, the manuscript includes overall reflections from students. While it provides listed results from the student questionnaire and reflections from those involved in the NOR-R-AM project, offering valid perspectives and feedback on the course content, there seems to be a lack of a clear outline of the course structure. Therefore, I suggest incorporating a flow diagram outlining all modules and activities into the manuscript during the revision process.
4. Are the results sufficient to support the interpretations and conclusions?
The students' reflections serve as documentation of the pedagogical efforts of the course. Sufficient documentation of the course activities, methods, and data used is provided within the manuscript5. Do the authors give proper credit to related work and clearly indicate their own new/original contribution?
The references throughout the manuscript are adequate and, in my opinion, appropriately credit both the current state of the art in geological research in the Arctic and the educational approach to teaching about Arctic geology. The selected students who have provided personal reflections on the course are included in the list of authors.
6. Does the title clearly reflect the contents of the paper?
yes
7. Does the abstract provide a concise and complete summary?
The abstract could be moderately modified to include more information about the course objectives, motivation, and the mission of UNIS as an institution, while reducing the focus on introducing the challenges of the modern Arctic. This aspect, in my opinion, should be expanded upon in the Introduction section.
8. Is the overall presentation well structured and clear?
The overall structure is good; however, the narrative appears segmented, and minor grammar/language corrections of some parts of the manuscript would be beneficial
I am missing, however a geological context. The reader comes back several times to the diverse geological events, that are not listed chronologically but rather to follow the individual course modules.
NEW FIGURE 1 A) It would be a great help if reader could be anchored with a figure/table/ timeline listing all major geological events (tectonic, volcanic but also mass extinctions) in chronological order, ideally listing all major events for the Arctic, and clearly indicating which of them manifest in Svalbard. B) Map of the Arctic showing compilation of some of the geological events, with the position of the orogenic belts and position of diverse LIPs mentioned in the text would be also beneficial (similar to fig 5A, but expanded). This would illustrate why Svalbard is considered a window to the arctic and highlight the Svalbard-Arctic link as well as illustrate the relevance of Svalbard for running the described course.
The issue with manuscript segmentation could be fixed by better introduction- paragraph (before the section 4.2.), informing that the following part of the manuscript describes the course modules.
I am missing also a NEW FIGURE 2 illustrating an outline of the course. Several modules are mentioned but the reader is left with a bit non-systematic structure of the course. An overview flow diagram listing the major modules (and activities performed as a part of the modules), including fieldwork and assessment would be beneficial.
I would therefore suggest replacing the figure 9 with a more general flow diagram mapping main course activities and moules, including type of assessment. This figure would be placed before section 4.2. Figure 9 in this context appears not very informative and not contributing to better understanding of all project activities.
Finally, I can see that the fieldwork is important part of the course, but there is very little information about field locations. Some names mentioned in the text are not well introduced. I would like to see A NEW FIGURE 3 with a map showing the location and maybe the gps track of summer/ spring fieldwork with a geological map as a background and additional information which geological event was considered an objective for the excursion: e.g. HALIP, WSFTB, CSB, ect..
9. Is the language fluent and precise?
Overall, the language throughout the manuscript is clear, precise, and easy to understand. However, some small sections require language corrections to ensure they match the high standards set by the rest of the manuscript.
10. Are the number and quality of references appropriate?
In my opinion, the references appear appropriate, but I haven't had the chance to check them all.
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AC1: 'Reply on RC1', Kim Senger, 08 May 2024
Dear Aleksandra Smyrak-Sikora
We thank you for your constructive response on the manuscript. We agree with your suggestions and will address these in a revised manuscript.
Specifically:
Comment: 3. Are the scientific methods and assumptions valid and clearly outlined?
The course content is systematically presented, detailing all course modules, introduced methods, and the data package utilized for certain activities. Additionally, the manuscript includes overall reflections from students. While it provides listed results from the student questionnaire and reflections from those involved in the NOR-R-AM project, offering valid perspectives and feedback on the course content, there seems to be a lack of a clear outline of the course structure. Therefore, I suggest incorporating a flow diagram outlining all modules and activities into the manuscript during the revision process.
Response: We will provide a new figure outlining the course itself and include it in section 4.
Comment: 7. Does the abstract provide a concise and complete summary?
The abstract could be moderately modified to include more information about the course objectives, motivation, and the mission of UNIS as an institution, while reducing the focus on introducing the challenges of the modern Arctic. This aspect, in my opinion, should be expanded upon in the Introduction section.
Response: We will revise the abstract as suggested, including the course objectives.
Comment: 8. Is the overall presentation well structured and clear?
The overall structure is good; however, the narrative appears segmented, and minor grammar/language corrections of some parts of the manuscript would be beneficial
I am missing, however a geological context. The reader comes back several times to the diverse geological events, that are not listed chronologically but rather to follow the individual course modules.
NEW FIGURE 1 A) It would be a great help if reader could be anchored with a figure/table/ timeline listing all major geological events (tectonic, volcanic but also mass extinctions) in chronological order, ideally listing all major events for the Arctic, and clearly indicating which of them manifest in Svalbard. B) Map of the Arctic showing compilation of some of the geological events, with the position of the orogenic belts and position of diverse LIPs mentioned in the text would be also beneficial (similar to fig 5A, but expanded). This would illustrate why Svalbard is considered a window to the arctic and highlight the Svalbard-Arctic link as well as illustrate the relevance of Svalbard for running the described course.
Response: We will add a figure with a timeline of the main tectono-thermal events affecting Svalbard and discussed during the course.
Comment: The issue with manuscript segmentation could be fixed by better introduction- paragraph (before the section 4.2.), informing that the following part of the manuscript describes the course modules.
I am missing also a NEW FIGURE 2 illustrating an outline of the course. Several modules are mentioned but the reader is left with a bit non-systematic structure of the course. An overview flow diagram listing the major modules (and activities performed as a part of the modules), including fieldwork and assessment would be beneficial.
I would therefore suggest replacing the figure 9 with a more general flow diagram mapping main course activities and moules, including type of assessment. This figure would be placed before section 4.2. Figure 9 in this context appears not very informative and not contributing to better understanding of all project activities.
Response: We will add a short description introducing section 4, and a new figure of the course architecture.
Regarding Figure 9, we disagree with the reviewer and would – unless there are strong limitations on number of figures, article length etc. from the editors – like to include it. The main reason is that it is a good, relatable, student-led figure that brings value to this type of paper and provides a clear student perspective on the NOR-R-AM project as it is. In addition, the figure links nicely to the text sections 6.2.1 to 6.2.4
Comment: Finally, I can see that the fieldwork is important part of the course, but there is very little information about field locations. Some names mentioned in the text are not well introduced. I would like to see A NEW FIGURE 3 with a map showing the location and maybe the gps track of summer/ spring fieldwork with a geological map as a background and additional information which geological event was considered an objective for the excursion: e.g. HALIP, WSFTB, CSB, ect..
Response: We will add a new figure (or include it with Figure 7) of the field locations.
We have also evaluated all 152 comments on the manuscript pdf, and will address all of them. The cosmetic changes are already fixed in the revised manuscript file.
Here in the response only a selection of the most critical ones is responded to:
Figure 2:
Comment: As much as I understand the artistic approach with this figure, I am missing quantitative expression of the scales (here and in the text). I suggest to update some digits indicting the scale below the arrows.
Response: We will update the figure to provide some clearer element of scale in space and time.
L330: We then focus on the Neoproterozoic and younger mountain building events (e.g., Timanidan Caledonian, Ellesmerian/Svalbardian, Uralian, and E 330 urekan mountain belts) that have either influenced thetectonic structure of Svalbard, or have been a major sedimentary source for sedimentary successions exposed in Svalbard.
Comment: would be nice to have a figure/ column illustrating the sequence of the main events and how these were discussed (seen in the field/ seen in geophysical data)
Response: We will add a new figure (or include it as a part of Figure 4) showing the main tectonic events we are covering in the course.
L445:
Comment: again, a lot of events that is hard to put into a sequence. please consider adding a figure with an overview of major geological events
Response: As above, we will add this figure in the revision.
L485: Fieldwork and Figure 7
Comment: I am missing a map showing the location of field locations and highlighting the names used in the text.
Comment: I am really missing a map showing the location of different sections
Response: We will add a map to Figure 7 with the locations mentioned in the text. Some of them are located in Figure 11 but it will be clearer to have it together with the field photos in Figure 7.
L525 assessment
Comment: this could be illustrated as a part of a flow diagram showing the course content
Response: Good idea, we will add a figure showing the different modules, assessment forms and teaching activities (lectures, seminars, field work, individual project work).
Figure 9:
Comment: I am wondering if this figure is really needed in this manuscript. Instead of a flow diagram of the course content and list of additional initiatives would be preferred instead of this illustration of individual student development. What is Hornsund field trip? Missing explanation in the text
Response: See comment above. We plan to do some cosmetic changes to the figure but would like to keep it to highlight the student perspectives not just on the course but on the NOR-R-AM project as such.
Thank you once again for the comments.
On behalf of the co-authors
Kim Senger, Bremen, 8th of May 2024
Citation: https://doi.org/10.5194/gc-2024-3-AC1
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RC2: 'Comment on gc-2024-3', Anonymous Referee #2, 05 Sep 2024
The authors outline the main features of a master's and PhD level teaching course called Arctic Tectonics and Volcanism, which has been taught over a number of years at UNIS in Svalbard. The manuscript serves as a good reflection of the style of courses on offer at UNIS, which incorporates fieldwork, groupwork, research questions and teaching. Feedback from the students is used to highlight the longer-term impact such courses have on students, of which I am in agreement, as I also took a UNIS course during my PhD (a different course, prior to the start of the Tectonics and Volcanism course). There are also many good examples of open data and open science within the manuscript. At times, the manuscript is overly long, with too much detail on the specifics of the topic. There are also many figures which do not relate to the manuscript, but rather serve as a showing of available data. The readers would be better served with more analysis of the educational approach and impact of such courses, or a better insight into the multidisciplinary aspect, for those who are not experts in geology.
Whilst the paper in its current form is just within scope of the GC journal, as it highlights practical, pedagogical research and geoscience curricula development for higher education, it does not go as far as to analyse the course in detail. The feedback from students has not been used to evaluate and amend the course, and there is little reflection from the authors on what limitations the course has. Additionally, it is not a completely novel method – this is typically the 'UNIS' model of teaching (guest lecturers, fieldwork and fieldwork safety, research question focused group work). However, this doesn't detract from the need for the publication – the increased geopolitical tension in the Arctic coupled with the decreasing numbers of students taking geoscience education at higher levels highlights the immediate need for more cross-border collaboration and continued science diplomacy in the region. This publication highlights that out-of-classroom education and networking can lead to further career development and increased interest in taking geology at PhD level.
With some minor corrections, I believe this manuscript should be published in GC.
Minor comments:
The abstract a bit too long – some of it reads like introduction. The list of what the course entails is too much information for the abstract. It could be shortened in the second paragraph to mention the main components (field safety, Arctic geology theory, group exercises, digital visualization tools, course assessment) but not go into detail.
The motivation for the publication could be stronger – I am left wondering if this should serve as a template for others who wish to teach this course. If you are to include some limitations of the course (content, pedagogical style, location) or reflection on how to improve, then I believe it could also serve as a foundation for others to build similar courses and/or a best practice assessment. Do you aim to have some longterm impact on the number of students in geosciences or increased careers in geology after education? As I do see this in the student feedback and discussion, but there is not a mention of this in the introduction, which could strengthen the motivation. At the moment, the motivation is very tectonics/volcanology specific, but it should be widened to fit the broader geoscience scope of the journal.
There is no reflection from the authors on the limitations of the course. There is a 'lessons learned' section, but doesn't really give any learnings. Whilst the education is free, travelling to Svalbard is not – and this therefore provides a very real financial barrier to many students (especially masters students who often do not have project funding with a travel budget). Additionally, living in Svalbard for 6 weeks is costly, especially for those who are not already living in Norway. Whilst fieldwork in Svalbard is relatively safe (limited concerns for people who identify as women or within the LGBTQ community for instance), travelling to a remote destination is still a limitation for some with visa issues for example (Svalbard is outside of Schengen).
Were there any questions in the survey/evaluation which asked the students for constructive feedback on how the course could be improved? Whilst we can't go back in time, I do think it is a shame that the evaluation came after so many years, which could make it difficult for those who joined earlier to remember their feedback. It would be useful going forward for you to evaluate the course each year and make changes based on that feedback. If this sort of critical feedback isn't available, perhaps the authors could reflect amongst themselves on ways the course should be improved. Do you also have any other demographic information besides country? Gender for instance?
There's a lot of information in section 4 which I do not think is needed. The subsections describing the course modules should be significantly shortened, or perhaps (as reviewer 1 suggested) the information could be displayed visually. Similarly, many of the figures seem redundant to the manuscript's focus. Figure 3/4/5 are geological maps and are a focus on the topic of the lectures given in the course, but are not related to the course pedagogy or the educational approach. These figures can be removed and the results/conclusions would still be the same. The paper really is too long, so I hope the authors can see the benefit of shortening it to focus on the key aspects that the paper should convey.
Specific Comments
Line 70: could we provide a statistic here? Perhaps take this for some inspiration: https://nordregio.org/maps/indigenous-population-in-the-arctic/. Whilst the density of Indigenous peoples varies and is relatively low in the European Arctic, there are also many millions of people who live there who are not Indigenous, and who require sustainable development and better education opportunities too.
Line 78-80: A reference or two could strengthen this section regarding the Arctic being in the spotlight of media and policies. Take a read of this and the relevant references therein: https://arcticyearbook.com/arctic-yearbook/2020/2020-briefing-notes/367-an-arctic-boom-of-policies-strategies-56-and-counting
Line 100-105: does this differ in non-Arctic nations? I could imagine that at least undergraduate education is carried out in country of origin for the vast majority of places/countries. I could be wrong though, I have not looked into it. In the case of the Arctic though, there is evidence of a southward migration of students (university level) and skilled worked to the south, due to the position of the capital cities outside of the north/arctic circle. It is complex, but there's a breakdown of countries here (Arctic+Scotland): https://www.pure.fo/files/24328830/Arctic_Connections_Final_Report_Rural_Youth_Out_Migration.pdf
Line 113: first mention of motivation – but a lot of relevant information above with which to strengthen the motivation further. Line 150 is the next motivation point – but could be stronger.
Line 131: I'm not sure this is true – there are regular field courses run by the geosciences department at UiT in Lyngen and other northern regions of Arctic Norway. Additionally, UiT and other universities use the Abisko research station in Sweden too.
Line 232: occurred since 'the' beginning
Line 246: 'one lecture' – how long is this lecture?
Line 556: There is no table 12, perhaps 2? However this table only showcases European and North American countries – where are the other students from?
Line 563: Can you split up the number of answers into the years? Did more people from the 2023 course respond than those from many years prior? Were you able to get in touch with those from 2018 with email and affiliation changes over time?
Line 579: This lines up with my comment above: It is interesting that many respondents are still involved in Arctic research, but does this reflect that the majority of respondents were from 2022 or 2023 perhaps? In which case, they may still be doing their studies/PhD? Or are there also cases of longevity in the career choices? Which could be interesting to highlight if so, as this could be a further motivation of the course.
Figure 8: Two of the pie charts have the same title.
Line 684: extra r in the sentence after 'necessary'.
Line 685: What are the nationalities/affiliations of the lecturers and guest lecturers? Does this course bring together not only students from diverse places but also the lecturers? One can look at the author list of course, but I assume these are not all the guest lecturers from over time.
Line 773 – 793: I personally don’t see the need for including this section – Table 5 is enough.
Conclusions: Perhaps bolster again the motivation of your paper – just to outline a project is not enough in the scope of the journal.
Citation: https://doi.org/10.5194/gc-2024-3-RC2 - AC2: 'Reply on RC2', Kim Senger, 15 Sep 2024